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Tuesday, July 12, 2011

IN-FORM POET: Dodoitsu


This week our featured form is the Dodoitsu.

The Dodoitsu is a fixed folk song form of Japanese origin and is often about love or humor. It has 26 syllables made of four lines of 7, 7, 7, 5 syllables respectively. It is unrhymed and non-metrical.

Marie’s Dodiotsu:

We speak of falling in love
and falling again from there,
while seldom coming to rest
on dedication.

Walt’s example:


A LONGING HEART

I’ve waited for your return,
which surely will not occur.
Cruel-hearted orb turns slowly
leaving me alone.

36 comments:

  1. Not Itsu Too Dodo!

    I wish I had a dodo
    I think I know a live one
    He's christian and a po-et
    A polski love God

    Wanda Landowska

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  2. not sure if these things have titles or not but if so, then I'll call it The Whole World

    The world becomes tangible,
    reduced to steady beating,
    continuous rise and fall,
    when held in your arms.

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  3. I long to taste you again,
    your warmth on my lips, my tongue,
    dripping on my chin, my sweet
    roasted marshmallow


    OK, don't know if that is actually funny but we had marshmallows last night and though I don't usually eat them, they tasted especially good. Guess my sweet tooth had a craving.

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  4. Psalm 31:23

    Love the LORD, all you His saints!
    The LORD preserves the faithful,
    And fully repays the proud.
    Be of good courage.

    Psalm 119:162

    I rejoice at Your word, LORD
    As one who finds great treasure.
    I hate and abhor lying,
    But I love Your law.

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  5. For my children

    who you are overwhelms me!
    tiny feet walk on my heart
    each step leaving an imprint
    that remembers love

    Shalom,
    Terri

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  6. His questions that challenged me.
    Laughter that was contagious.
    It is in the simple things
    that I miss his love.

    ~Paula

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  7. Not exactly love, except for love for the ocean. Goes with PA prompt.

    On my back, basking in sun
    Whooshing sounds increase and wane
    Imagining beach, but home
    Traffic rushing by

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  8. Truth is beautiful beyond
    doubt but then again so is
    lying said someone clever
    Ralph W Emerson

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  9. I couldn't resist giving this one a try. I am all about Japanese poetry these days. It looks very tanka-ish. :)

    RAINDROPS ON MY SKYLIGHT

    I awaken to a sound
    so unfamiliar, I just
    can't place it for a moment.
    Welcome back, old friend!

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  10. there are eleven thousand
    six hundred and eighty plus
    days--some, pretty damn funny--
    in thirty-two years

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  11. I've done another poem that has a structure to it that I don't know how to incorporate into this comment box. So...I'm posting a link:

    http://whenwordsescape.wordpress.com/2011/07/13/poetic-love-story/

    Thanks, in advance, for popping over to visit! :)

    ~Paula

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  12. They met one night at seven
    fell in love at half past eight
    by ten joined in sexual bliss
    until the wife came.

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  13. Set Free

    Love unconditionally.
    Live in service to others.
    Give all you can give always.
    You will be set free.

    By Michael Grove

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  14. Working from Home

    You brought to my attention
    we had the house to ourselves.
    Noon-light caressed the bedpost,
    my earlobe you bit.

    By David W.

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  15. Here is a string of them!


    STILL THE BEST MEDICINE
    (A Dodoitsu String)

    Beyond drugs and surgery,
    let’s consider the value
    of observing the world with
    a comedic eye

    that sees humor in distress
    and refuses to blink twice
    at the ills that life might bring.
    Learn to laugh them down.

    When we were infants, we laughed
    all the time. Why did we stop?
    Were we told, Get serious!
    Why did we obey?

    Life’s road is filled with landmines
    but you can’t float above them
    nor can you tiptoe in fear.
    Take your chances and smile.

    Some will decide you’re a fool,
    a person of low IQ.
    Just nod and they’ll go away.
    then laugh up your sleeve.

    Drug companies and doctors
    will discourage your outbursts
    of laughter, for they know well
    the power it brings.

    Ignore them and outlive them!
    Humor builds strong hearts; it will
    add years to your life. Now
    take your medicine!

    #

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  16. Inspiring string, Salvatore!

    Kevin -- if you can post a string of Dodoitsu Psalms in the Latin Vulgate, I'll really be impressed! :-)

    David

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  17. My first time on this site! Love learning new forms!


    She felt more lonely with him
    Than she felt being alone
    Love given but not returned
    A gift unopened

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  18. Loving these new voices! Welcome to Kevin, Wanda, David, and lolamouse! Cara, so wonderful seeing you out here as well.

    Y'all ROCK!

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  19. I know you hate cooking, love.
    And I can only make toast.
    So here is the perfect date –
    I’ve ordered pizza.



    The hot night enfolded us
    A bright shimmer of moisture
    Graced our tangled vine of limbs
    Breathless on the green.

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  20. I hide your kisses in the
    sagebrush and rushes waving,
    sighing along the shoreline,
    my heart quivering.

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  21. Here is another dodoitsu, although not exactly about love, nor is it particularly humorous:

    Gliding over cloister stones
    phantom monks in cloth of grey
    string small prayers together
    breath by breath by breath.


    You may also read it here and see the photograph that inspired it.

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  22. IN-FORM POET from Poetic Bloomings - The DODOITSU - This week our featured form is the Dodoitsu.
    The Dodoitsu is a fixed folk song form of Japanese origin and is often about love or humor. It has 26 syllables made of four lines of 7, 7, 7, 5 syllables respectively. It is unrhymed and non-metrical.



    His Pedestal


    He has placed her up so high.
    His pedestal now her home.
    When she falls he catches her.
    She is always safe.


    By Michael Grove

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  23. The Sound of You

    I don't need to ask if you
    are awake; I hear the sounds
    of you - sniffs and belches and
    I love every sound of you.

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  24. I had second thoughts. Revised version at http://wp.me/p1bqY3-cp

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  25. Walt's idea of exploring new forms twice per month was brilliant.

    This one, I can't help but see as "Dodo, it's you!"

    Now, y'all try to get THAT out of your heads!

    Warm Hannah'esque smiles to you all.

    Marie Elena

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    Learn to fall and catch yourself
    Live life hard, die strong

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    1. Hello Lisa!

      Welcome to Poetic Bloomings. Your Dodoitsu is absolutely lovely, and we would love to hear more from you. We have actually moved to Wordpress ... this blogger site is no longer active. Please come on over to poeticbloomings.com at http://poeticbloomings.com/.

      Thank you so much!
      Marie Elena

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